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Buried Secrets

She walked through the trees, pushing the leaves with the toes of her new boots. The sound reminded her of his hand sliding along the sheet when he swept the bedding to the floor. What a mad weekend that had been. Their last weekend together. His last weekend, period.

She knelt to bury the knife.

 

 

Laura Rittenhouse.

  • Sandra-Jane Goddard

    Nice contrast between the ‘then’ and ‘now’, Laura. Dark indeed.

    • Laura

      Thanks. I wanted the new boots to signify a carefree (heartless?) attitude towards what she’d done. I’m glad you picked up on the contrast.

  • Louie Winslow

    Bravo, beginning, middle, and ending. Finished with the burying of the knife.

    • Laura Rittenhouse

      Thank you. It was a lot to get into 55 words. Forget about motivation and consequences, that has to be left to the reader’s imagination. I wonder how many readers think she was a victim who fought back and how many have decided she’s a psycho black widow sort.

  • Diana Feltner

    Very nicely done, Laura! I was thinking she was simply reminiscing about a past lover till the knife. Then it was as you said to Louie, I wondered which she was, the victim or the psycho.

    • Laura Rittenhouse

      As the author I guess I should know, but I don’t. Maybe if I turned it into a longer short – or even a novel, then she’d reveal herself to me, but right now, she’s a mystery.

      • Diana Feltner

        I for one, think you should pursue it. :)

  • Alan Barker

    Passion does not come more deadly than this. It’s amazing how one short sentence can shock the reader into a new interpretation.

    • Laura Rittenhouse

      Yeah, kind of highlights that old “love sucks” catch phrase 😮

  • Wendy

    Brilliant! I love unexpected twists.

  • Jennifer Alston

    WOW. I love this. I am in love with the title. Definitely something I would read. “It would be his last.” I want more.