Fire-2

Pragmatic

“Autumn’s a beautiful season,” Angela said, gazing out, admiring the reds and other warm colors.

“It reminds me of death,” Jonathan wheezed.

“Not surprising. Everything makes you think of death.”

“That’s because I’m dying. How can you be so callous?”

Not callous. Just pragmatic, Angela thought, stroking the divorce papers, now moot, in her pocket.

 

Michael Seese.

  • http://www.austinbriggs.com Austin Briggs

    Hi Michael, thanks for this powerful, dramatic story.

  • r.j.saxon

    Great story Micheal. Nice usage of the words, Moot and Pragmatic. :) R.j.

  • Sandra-Jane Goddard

    Michael, I like the way that the twist in your story offers a hint of evil against the backdrop of an otherwise soothing view.

  • Debi Swim

    This opens up a lot of pathways for a story. Is she heartless? Is he really a jerk? Nice twist at the end.

  • Louie Winslow

    Filled with emotion. It is amazing how much you are able to convey in so few words.

  • http://bradwbeatty.com/ Brad W. Beatty

    Very well written…I am sure this story has probably played out in real life somewhere.

  • Grace Black

    Wonderful use of 55 words! Nice impact.

  • Ross Coppage

    Nice snapshot of a moment, with harsh reality weaved in.

  • Diana Feltner

    It begs the question, which person is the real villain, good story.

  • Luke Reynolds

    Wow. I only found this because it won but wow, I’m thankful I got the chance to read it!

    • Michael Seese

      To Luke (and all),

      Thanks for the kind words. And an especially big thanks to Luke, who TOLD me that my story had been chosen.